I am now in Minjok high school's camp. I am missing you a lot. Every time after the school or in school, I draw on you. Unfortunately I am in camp of here so I can't see you for a month. Sorry to left you in house, I am regretting it. Cause I have too many things to get, I just have to give you up.In here, I made new friends, Isabella and Iris,kind and cute roommates. Grace, Ally, and Dorothy are next room same door friend in 704. So don't worry about me, now. I am drawing on any paper I got in my hand so I have to erase it back. I won't forget you and my drawing method cause I am practicing a lot in boring classes, so don't be so worried. Oh, I didn't tell you important thing! I got new many friends from class, Ally, Isabella, and Susan. Oh, Ally is both my next roommate and classmate. She is living with just studying. My classmates are so cool and kind so sometimes I feel they are better than roommates that sometimes just playing without me. They are my best of the best friends now. I am doing well on here so concentrate on your life at house!
Waiting for camp to be over,
Love
Lily
Hi Lily! I'm your Writing TA. This is truly a sincere letter to your drawing notebook. It feels as if you are writing a diary to your notebook. However, I think the length is a bit short so try elaborating on one of your fun experiences at GLPS. :)
답글삭제Hi Lily! I enjoyed your ode:) I want to point out just a few tings. First, I want you to elaborate more. Your ode is good, but it is too short. Try to add more details about how and why the note is so special to you. Another thing is that I want you to try to use your own and unique expressions to show how meaningful and special the note is to you. You are using only generic terms here. I hope to read more of your works:) Keep trying!
답글삭제Also, please, please remove the word verification thing! Go to Design-Settings-Posts and Comments and put "no" for word verification.
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